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Comic 149 - Ch 6 Page 18

17th Jan 2018, 12:00 AM in Chapter 6
Ch 6 Page 18
Average Rating: 5 (1 votes)
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InjuredPelican 17th Jan 2018, 12:00 AM edit delete
InjuredPelican
Thanks to all new readers and subscribers!

Comments:

Wargyrl 17th Jan 2018, 9:48 AM edit delete reply
Wargyrl
The figures are nicely drawn. However, the figures are also colored to match their 'dark and fiery' background. This makes it hard for the reader to see the figures or to understand what the figures are doing.

You might consider whether you actually need to color the people in a 'realistic' way, or whether you should color the people differently than the background so the people are easier to see. You might try to color the people the same way that they would be colored in natural daylight, but leave the background dark and fiery to show the situation. That way the figures would appear to the reader the way the reader would understand them in the natural world, where the figures would be easy to understand, because the figures would be moving and in three dimensions.
InjuredPelican 17th Jan 2018, 10:26 PM edit delete reply
InjuredPelican
Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. I updated the image with hopefully clearer figures. Let me know if this is enough of an improvement.
Wargyrl 18th Jan 2018, 3:27 AM edit delete reply
Wargyrl
Nice! This is definitely an improvement!